Blues lyrics - whaddaya think?

[curtisstetka]

I'm happy to say that my band Mr. Thingee is getting it back together after nearly a two year hiatus.

We're working on drastically revamping the old material and writing some new stuff.

Anyway, new verse for the Been Mistreated By My Woman Blues. Does this work, ya think?

I

One and one is two (da NAH na nuh)
Two and two is fo (da NAH na nuh)
fo and fo is eight (da NAH na nuh)
And the square root of the hypotenuse is equal to the sum of the squares of the two sides…

IV - I
Having the blues so bad, my participles are dangling, baby.
Yee-ow, somebody gone get hurt that way!

V – IV – I – V
My woman so low down and mean
She sold my ½ inch Black and Deck hammer drill with keyless chuck on e-bay.


Constructive criticism welcome. Thanks.

[clayville]

I believe the proper term is "Black and DeckER".

[curtisstetka]

oh yeah. duh. typo

[chuckocaster]

and i have keys, almost as many as a janitor...

[telecast]

In the second verse, the second line:

"Yee-ow, somebody gone get hurt that way!"

Try:

"Yeah, someone gon' get hurt that way."

Other than that, I think it says a lot about your skills as a lyricist.

[TT100]

My baby's sister
Said she'd come and stay
Just one thing daddy
Gotta send your baby away

chorus

Oh baby
Don't know what I'm gonna do
I'm a lucky man to have
those sibling nibbling blues

Oh yea.

[curtisstetka]

Other than that, I think it says a lot about your skills as a lyricist.

Kind of like how the Uglocaster says a lot about my taste in instruments?

[cooltone]

my head is hurtin' so bad
thinkin' 'bout the X and the Y
don't know how she factors in
but I do know I'd like to get me some pi.

[funkyguitar]

hypotenuse - possibly the first time this word has been used in a blues, or any song ?

Good band name too !

[Gravity Jim]

hypotenuse - possibly the first time this word has been used in a blues, or any song ?

Johnny Mercer wrote lyrics for a song called "The Square of the Hypotenuse" for some Danny Kaye movie.

The word also appears in "I Am The Very Model Of A Modern Major General" by Gilbert & Sullivan. ("... with many cheerful facts about the square of the hypotenuse.")

Also search for Ace Troubleshooter's "All I Ever Needed to Know I Learned in Calculus."

"Now I'm not trying to be obtuse...."

[funkyguitar]

Now I'm thinking that there may be a band called "Hypotenuse."

[Kap'n]

Johnny Mercer wrote lyrics for a song called "The Square of the Hypotenuse" for some Danny Kaye movie.

The word also appears in "I Am The Very Model Of A Modern Major General" by Gilbert & Sullivan. ("... with many cheerful facts about the square of the hypotenuse.")

Also search for Ace Troubleshooter's "All I Ever Needed to Know I Learned in Calculus."

"Now I'm not trying to be obtuse...."

Not as part of a song, but the scarecrow in The Wizard of Oz says it as well.

[telecast]

The word also appears in "I Am The Very Model Of A Modern Major General" by Gilbert & Sullivan. ("... with many cheerful facts about the square of the hypotenuse.")

"

That one I remembered. Not the others.

[bradw]

Ummm ... not to take a red pen to your homework but ... I believe it's "the square of the hypotenuse is equal to the sum of the squares of the two sides." Not square root. Darn Pythagoras!

[rudutch]

you scare me

[bradw]

you scare me

I scare me too. It's tough to shake 4 years of engineering school.

[rudutch]

stop messin with my slew rate, baby
time has come for you to take a walk
I'm not talkin' Equivalent series inductance
you gotta stop your Near End Crosstalk

[Guitar_Mc]

I scare me too. It's tough to shake 4 years of engineering school.

Crap, I thought it was seven years.
Then again, I did have a real good time.

[curtisstetka]

This is what gives me the blues.