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    Re: songwriters' lounge

    here a while back I posted the lyrics to my song cloudburst.....thanks btw to all for the kind comments.....here is a demo of the song

    http://www.soundclick.com/bands/song...songID=4060675

    comments, criticism, and what not are welcome....
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    this is one i wrote awhile ago and forgot about til today when i found it flipping thru my notebook.

    a picture of virtue (what i'm calling it for now)

    how much longer, must we make the same mistakes?
    playing games for eachother, trying to save face
    we're not so different, we guard eachothers' hearts
    it's harder to be pushed away, than torn apart

    the birds pecked out the eyes of a cat, that's not yet dead
    he lied dying in my drive, til i put a bullet in his head
    i wait for the pictures, you promised to send
    the sun's going down now, will it rise again?

    you're trying to paint a picture of virtue
    but the colors are starting to blur
    and that's who you always were
    untrue

    a cool wind blows thru the screen, and i still have you on my mind
    i wait here on the porch, cause all i have is time
    we're not so different, we guard eachother's hearts
    it's harder to be pushed away, than torn apart
    "don't worry, i'm a professional!"

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    man, that's bleak, chuck.

    I dug this out of a drawer this morning. It sounds like an Randy Newman song.

    I would have loved knowing S.J. Perelman
    I could have talked to him all night long
    Sipping old Scotch
    Sitting on the patio
    He'd tell me a story and I'd sing him a song

    I'd have a crush on Dorothy Parker
    Sneaking out for lunch at the Algonquin Hotel
    I would have loved hanging out with Perelman...
    Boy, that woulda been swell.

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    i love newman!

    dig those lyrics buddy.
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    Quote Originally Posted by chuckocaster
    we're not so different, we guard eachother's hearts
    it's harder to be pushed away, than torn apart
    I've read this a few times now, chucko.
    Yeah, it's bleak, but damn... this is really good.

    I don't know what you have in mind for a melody, but in the chorus, I might be inclined to leave "untrue" out.

    "you're trying to paint a picture of virtue
    but the colors are starting to blur
    and that's who you always were
    untrue"


    You may really need it to nail things together, meterwise, in the melody.

    With the "trying" and "blur-ring," and even going back to the "pushed away" you're describing a gradual decay, things aren't quite what they once seemed.
    To me, that's where the power of it is.
    "Untrue" seems too definitive.

    Again, I'm just sitting here like a dumbass, reading the lyrics. "Untrue" might be the exact right move once the song is a aural thing.

    But I dig it.
    It really crept up and grew on me with repeated readings.
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    thanks neo,

    what i'm starting to figure out is that i need to post recordings with my lyrics. i've been told that the way i sing and put words together is "off" from the norm, or what others would do.

    i get what you're saying about the "untrue" being out of place. and i think you hit upon what i was going for. i wrote that song about someone i had a relationship with, hoping it was going to turn out, it not, us still being cival enough to be cival to eachother, but me now realizing that is was going to be bad from the beginning, even though we knew eachother (going into the relationship) pretty well.

    here is a new one for you all. i'm finding myself turning more and more into "the boss", and that's weird for me. nothing against the guy, i respect him a lot, but i don't much care for his music. the lyrics might not convey this turn, but whenever i play my newer songs they remind me of him

    knock down, drag out (working title)

    i put myself down long ago
    it was easier than trying to let go
    and you, you're the same
    you'd rather act the fool, than play their game
    that's you, and that's me
    we live outside of society
    cause it's hard, to make ammends
    for what you believe, and who's your friend

    and they will never understand what we're about
    they just want to drag us down, and put us out

    that night i could tell by the look in your eyes
    you were gonna do something crazy, and not apologize
    it's been hard to fight this war
    to wait this long, and still be strong
    but you, you comprehend
    the difference between mice and men
    and that's why, we act this way
    we don't pull any punches with what we say

    and they will never understand what we're about
    they just want to drag us down, and put us out

    (bridge)
    being right never got anybody nowhere
    looking down on those who frown
    will just make you remember the ones who got you there
    say what you might, but we will never get what we're looking for
    i am too strong to turn myself into a whore
    where does that leave us? what are we to do?
    we mostly stand around, and stare at our shoes
    cause it's easier to write things off
    than to kill 'em where they stand, and breathe the dust
    we will never follow suite
    we load our guns, but will not shoot
    cause blood is hard to clean
    and the message they will never glean




    i think all the songs i write are bleak. but then again, it seems real bleak out here to me.
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    Heres my song i wrote today. Its Called "LAtina Katrina". Thats all I have , a title-I couldnt think of any lyrics. I dont want to use "Blew me away", thats been done.I dont wanna use latrin-a either. Someone can have this, its not copyrighted. How bout ...."my Latina Katrina,she tossed me around , i tried to avoid her, head for higher ground, ....dark black hair and light green eyes, like a ray of sun through dark and stormy skies , Latina Katrina, dont you leave me stranded ,clawing for survival when your rain clouds have disbanded...some sh#T like that.

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    http://www.jeffreypepperrodgers.com/songwriting.htm

    I've been cleaning out the book shelf lately, tossing lots of magazines.
    I found this article about "Editing Your Songs."
    Some good advice.
    Thought it might be of use to some of us.

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    I didn't know this thread was around. Thanks for dredging it up. I've been a fountain for the last year, with song after song just pouring out. I think I've written like 16 since this past February. Here's one of my favorites. I wrote this sitting at the bar at Hooter's in Memphis, TN. :-) Just 2 chords: A7 and D9. It's got a half-time beat that just sorta grooves. It's also a crowd favorite.

    Just My Luck © 2006 Big Dreams Productions

    My life is not my own
    To do with as I please
    Fate has got the cruelest jokes
    She likes to play on me
    I've dreamed of you a thousand times
    Before the day we met
    Now my dreams, they haunt my waking hours
    Too many things left unsaid

    I don't know, but I've been told
    If you ever slow down you die
    But running after you is something I can't do
    Girl, you're making me lose my mind
    I want to hold you all night long
    Want to feel you in my arms
    Wake up in the morning light
    Get lost inside your charms

    Don't know how much longer I can
    Hold on to this dream
    Every time I think about it, girl
    It makes me want to scream
    I need a hint from you
    Can't you see I need a sign
    I'm tired of all this run-around
    Tired of you being so unkind

    So, baby, give us just one chance
    You've got to find a way
    Do you ever think about me
    I think of you both night and day
    Baby, just one kiss from you could
    Turn my life around
    Call me up
    Whenever you're feeling down
    --The music is all around us. I can hear it. Can you?

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    Nobody is doing any songwriting? Hmmmmmm....let's get this thread back up and running again....

    Here is one I wrote recently. Fire away with suggetions, comments, critiques, etc......

    I Stand Alone
    Copyright 2008 Loyd Van Horn

    I don't know where I'm going,
    but I'm sure I will.
    Living on the breeze is part of the thrill.
    Took too long to come down from the hill,
    but I'm here.

    Taking over the reins shouldn't be hard to do.
    But life has a way of running from you.
    Next thing you know you've been thrown into,
    the fire.

    Now I stand alone
    Sowing these seeds I've sown.
    Don't look away now.
    I stand alone
    Sowing these seeds I've sown.
    Don't fall too far now.
    Cause I stand alone.

    I won't apologize for this light in my eyes
    Don't ask for my patience so I won't have to lie
    Long ago the world was yours and mine,
    Now it's gone.
    Too many words seem to be slipping away
    We both know I shouldn't say them anyway.
    The cold always seems to come when the day,
    turns to night.

    (repeat chorus)

    All the walls that surround you seem too high to climb
    Still you wonder what's on the other side
    Try as I might I can't help you to find,
    your way.
    When the people you rely on have said their goodbyes
    And you can't bring them back no matter how hard you try
    What will you say when you don't know why,
    I'm still there.


    (repeat chorus)

    Hope to have the demo online soon. More to come, I have had a creative explosion since August.
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    "I stand accused, just like you, for being born without a silver spoon." - Richard Ashcroft

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    And another.......

    I Don't Know
    Copyright © 2008 Loyd Van Horn

    Walking through the crowd with all intentions
    Of blowing away your mind
    Looking for my redemption
    Looking to make the time
    But I don't know
    Yeah I don't know

    Saying the words I've wanted
    Open my windows wide
    Looks like the tables are turning
    Looks like the time is right
    But I don't know
    Yeah I don't know

    [chorus]
    I just don't know
    What to say
    It wouldn't matter anyway
    Cause I don't know how I feel
    I just hope this moment is real
    But I don't know
    Yeah I don't know

    Walking on the edge of all that's certain
    And trying hard not to fall
    Running from all that's a burden
    And running straight into the wall
    But I don't know
    Yeah I don't know

    Maybe this time can be different
    Maybe I've figured it out
    Maybe I'll get what I've wanted
    Maybe tomorrow is now
    But I don't know
    Yeah I don't know

    Repeat chorus
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    "I stand accused, just like you, for being born without a silver spoon." - Richard Ashcroft

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    Alright, this is something I have been struggling with for....well.....ever since I began writing songs.

    The two I posted above represent the only two instances in the last 30 songs I have written of a complete and done song. The rest.....

    - Have no chorus. Not that every song has to have a chorus, but surely one or two in your catalog should.....

    - Have a verse or two and that's about it.....

    - Have no lyrics at all, just music (either just chords and an arrangement, a guitar line/melody).

    I keep everything in a nice little black book so that I can combine songs, re-write, add to, what have you.

    Is there ever a time when you just move on when it comes to a song? Do you go back to it? Or are you fortunate enough to have it all laid out in front of you and you just act as a songwriting conduit.

    I have had a few of those moments. Not many, but a few. Those are pretty cool......
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    keep a shoe box full of stuff like that dude...periodically i go through it just to refresh my memory...usually nothing comes of it and i let it percolate a while longer, then outta the blue something'll jump outta my subconscious and voila! so be a pack rat's all i'm really saying.

    come to think of it, that seems to be my primary writing technique...the three newest songs on my soundclick are perfect examples...they were all song fragments that had been floating around, in some case for years, 'till some divine spark triggered them into completion.
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    it can be fun to take what was a song you were unhappy with and turn it into one you like.

    I have songs where the verse started with one song, the chorus was from another and the melody line and chords were from something else.

    I call it the Franken-song style of songwriting.....
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    A goofy little bakersfield type thang i penned the other day...

    I gave you my heart (and you handed me my ass)

    this hangover's dedicated to the one who broke my heart
    made me see the lies i told myself right from the start
    what i fool i was for thinkin' that i ever had a chance
    i gave you my heart and you handed me my ass

    three times i tried to give you what wasn't mine to share
    three times you gave it back to me, i guess you just don't care
    what a fool i was for thinkin' i ever had a chance
    i gave you my heart and you handed me my ass

    bridge: i found out the hard way some heartaches never heal
    but at the bottom of a bottle they don't seem so ****ing real
    thank you dear for showing me i never stood a chance
    i gave you my heart and you handed me my ass

    lead
    repeat bridge
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    *Stands up* Hi, I'm Power_13, and I have a problem.

    The best example of this is probably from tonight. I was watching this BBC show where this guy is travelling around the Philippines. In Manila, one of the big cities, they have a cemetery where people live - they literally live in the big tombs of the rich families. Poorer people are sealed in these tiny vault-type things in a wall, and their families have to pay something like five dollars a year to keep them there. If they miss a payment, the bones are removed and the place is made available for someone else.

    I got that funny giddy feeling where you've just stumbled upon The Best Song Idea Ever. Now I'm sat with an idea for a chorus (more of the ending of a verse) and a first verse that (1) needs a bit of work and (2) I'm sure is ripping off the melody from another song. Bugger.

    And this is the most I've written in a long line of weekends.

    (edit)
    Getting a bit better...worked out the chords for the chorusy bit. At least now I can fit some sort of verse structure there and maybe get ideas off that.
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    Quote Originally Posted by Power_13 View Post
    *Stands up* Hi, I'm Power_13, and I have a problem.

    The best example of this is probably from tonight. I was watching this BBC show where this guy is travelling around the Philippines. In Manila, one of the big cities, they have a cemetery where people live - they literally live in the big tombs of the rich families. Poorer people are sealed in these tiny vault-type things in a wall, and their families have to pay something like five dollars a year to keep them there. If they miss a payment, the bones are removed and the place is made available for someone else.

    I got that funny giddy feeling where you've just stumbled upon The Best Song Idea Ever. Now I'm sat with an idea for a chorus (more of the ending of a verse) and a first verse that (1) needs a bit of work and (2) I'm sure is ripping off the melody from another song. Bugger.

    And this is the most I've written in a long line of weekends.

    (edit)
    Getting a bit better...worked out the chords for the chorusy bit. At least now I can fit some sort of verse structure there and maybe get ideas off that.
    Let's hear some of it!

    There is something darkly fascinating about people living in a tomb....and your family still having to pay rent for your bones even after you are dead and gone....sounds like a blues song in there somewhere.

    I can hear George Thorogood now.....

    "Undertaker asked my son. He said "Son, where's yo daddy's rent"
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    in a similar vein, it's an historical fact that jack mccall, the assasin of wild bill hickock, was buried with the noose still around his neck...always thought there was a country song in there somewhere.
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    Quote Originally Posted by guitars247 View Post
    Let's hear some of it!

    There is something darkly fascinating about people living in a tomb....and your family still having to pay rent for your bones even after you are dead and gone....sounds like a blues song in there somewhere.
    All I've got so far is the ends of the verses:
    There between the tombs and rows of stones
    In the city of the dead we made our home

    With variations in the words depending on the verse. At the moment it seems like it's going to be about two brothers who leave the rice terraces in north Luzon and head to the capital Manila, one gets sick and dies, the other can't afford to keep the body in one of the "vaults". He ends up alone and far from anyone he knows.

    Working on the verses, but not much there yet. Will update once I get somewhere.
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    I take inspriation and guidance in whatever form it takes and from whatever source it might come from.

    I saw these nuggets the other night, and couldn't help but think they'd be of use here.

    Struggling with that initial spark of inspiration, and the frustration you may encounter.

    and

    Connecting sound with feeling, place, etc: what does what you're playing evoke?

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    I frickin loved that episode because of those two clips....sums it all up.....
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    Hope nobody minds me bringing this up again...no replies for a while, but it was only on the second page...

    It's taken me about five years to finish this. Procrastination due to self confidence, unfamiliarity with the subject matter and general laziness.

    I have a few notes for the next draft but want an external look on it (five years looking at bits of it, I may have missed a problem). It's acoustic folk based. Title is The Highwayman (not very original, I know )


    They call him Henry Davies
    He's a complicated man
    With hunger in his heart and a pistol in his hand

    He lost his job in eighteen-seven
    And his wife in eighteen-ten
    Now his son's his only family, the dark's his closest friend

    In the evening he'd take his flintlock pistol from its case
    And head out to the highways with a scarf across his face
    Step out of the shadows as a stagecoach drew near
    Raise his pistol and cry "stand and deliver"

    In the spring of eighteen-fourteen
    On the Great North Eastern Road
    The heath was full of highwaymen and carts from which they stole

    A traveller stole a rifle
    From a Hounslow stable hand
    To protect his purse and body from a lurking highwayman

    He headed out that morning with a vow to do his worst
    To any highwayman he came across and Henry was the first
    He dind't even stop as he fired off a round
    And left Henry laying wounded bleeding on the ground
    He dragged himself home through fields of dirt and mud
    With buckshot in his stomach and a lung full of blood
    And later in the evening with his son by his side, Henry Davies died

    (guitar solo here)

    They call him Charlie Davies
    He's a complicated man
    Anger in his heart, his father's pistol in his hand
    Steps out of the darkness
    As he hears a cab draw near
    Fires his father's gun and shouts "stand and deliver, sir"
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    Redrafted the above (I've edited the post instead of posting it again), and just trying to finish up the first draft of this one...I wanted to try a twist on the "person far away from the object of their affections" theme, so I made it a ship's cartgrapher from ye olde days longing to return home. Yeah, probably already been done too, but what the hell The title is The Cartographer's Love Song.


    Six hundred suns have sailed the sky
    Gold in bright blue
    Three thousand miles have passed me by
    SInce I last saw you

    I dream of the days we used to share
    And I miss the long summer nights
    Of wandering through fields and empty squares
    And streets bathed in starlight

    I'm just a drifter of these seas
    A stranger in foreign lands
    Sea charts and maps surrounding me
    All measured by my own hands

    Exploring these far and distant shores
    And unknown borders
    But one day these hands will guide me home
    To familiar waters

    Storms and sirens stand before my bow
    Bearing souls of sailros lost at sea
    But I would batten down these hatches and let my sails free
    If it brought you closer to me

    Some men are married to the waves
    And bound by the ocean
    Others are tethered to the chains
    They can't bear to have broken
    And some men are driven by the thrill
    Of risk and adventure
    But all that I long for are the hills
    And streets I remmeber

    And the stars that fill your sky with light
    Are the same that cut the ocean gloom
    And they'll guide me like a beacon on a path straight and true
    Safely cross the sea back to you


    And when this journey's over and I see your shores again
    I'll walk barefoot for miles in your sand
    And I'll find myself again where I stood years ago
    And learnt to map the contours of your land
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    Re: songwriters' lounge

    I've messed about with some of the verses again. For a song about someone who finds themselves far from home and missing the place they grew up in, I didn't think the last verse conveyed the fondness for the place anywhere near well enough.

    Here's an MP3.

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    Speaking of songwriters...

    American Masters: Carole King and James Taylor
    On PBS right now, 'til 9:30PM EST.

    Check your listings. It's bound to be on a again.
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    Building


    My barn


    In Soho


    Ain't nobody


    Gonna see me now


    My headcase


    Is like a staircase


    It goes up and down
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    Inspired by Edgar Allan Poe's The Raven I wrote bummed out about missing my friend Paloma, I call it;

    El Paloma

    Senseless sorrow to contour fore this morrow I explore sore weak and hollow
    Haste traced in regret to keep my wallow fore your light I did follow before
    Darkness consumed what was once bright now swallowed; Will I see her again? I dove strike:
    Playing games of chance; Awarding chance to she; I repeat: Will I see her again?
    I pray for a break in an escape I can borrow or take for free;
    As I pull hairs that make me sneeze;
    Watching TV looking for content that I like
    and if it airs it'll be and if not -- It wasn't meant to be (just wasn't meant for me)
    Faith can communicate in many ways; Filled with hope I cope grown radiant over this maiden laden
    With joy fore delusions do toy and illusions deployed prove to destroy the weak and annoy;
    Why?!
    Why hath I put my faith into such garbage? Why can't love be planted?
    Why must I be left alone upset and on my own I ask it,
    God, is this thy plan thou has in mind? Do you remind me of blessings took for granted now departed to memory?
    Am I to thank thee for a future of misery? Do I explore what the heart can endure? Or accept thy plan for me oh Lord!
    Tossed forever and forever restored will restore me; Nevermore



    This also proved to exercise/stretch/flex my lyric writing muscle 'as it were'.

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    Re: songwriters' lounge

    Here, sing my song along to this;










    WELCOME TO THE GHETTO





    "Oh my God


    We re-wrote this"





    Welcome to the ghetto


    We got what you need


    We know every single dealer


    So today we deal you weed


    But if today you find I'm unkind


    Then find the bitch who crossed me


    You lookin' for some more to smoke


    Yet nothin' comes for free





    In the ghetto


    Welcome to the ghetto


    Now your ass is gonna, ch, ch, ch, ch, ch, ch, ch, ch, choke, choke


    I, I wanna see that dick croak





    Welcome to the ghetto


    The ghetto where we blaze


    The cops don't care


    So we don't go so us dealers gotta raise


    N' she's got a very nice ass


    That's a nice ass to me


    But that ass was in S.W.9


    N' now we see Tweety


    In the ghetto


    Grief in Heath better let go


    Let go, let, let, let go of me


    Y'know... You just another fucker'ree





    Welcome to the ghetto


    Summers we live out on the street


    We really don't give a fuck


    At any sucker who brings their heat


    N' it's all true what we say


    Said I've seen it yesterday


    Ricky was the king of Bricky


    But then Shannel blew his ass away


    (SND EFX: GUN SHOT X2)





    In the ghetto


    Welcome to the ghetto


    Now your ass is gonna, ch, ch, ch, ch, ch, ch, ch, ch, choke, choke


    I, I wanna see that dick croak





    When they come, they come to, they come to bust my fun


    My fun my fun my fun...


    RAHHHHHHH...


    ...TID! (rarted)






    You know how this life goes


    It's death by me or an S.T.D


    So why you wanna try


    In the ghetto


    Welcome to the ghetto


    Now your ass is gonna, ch, ch, ch, ch, ch, ch, ch, ch, choke, choke


    In the ghetto


    Welcome to the ghetto


    Watch her, her, her


    Her from S.W.9


    Ghetto


    Welcome to the ghetto


    Now your ass is gonna, ch, ch, ch, ch, ch, ch, ch, ch, choke, choke


    Only in the ghetto


    Welcome to the ghetto


    Now your ass is


    Your ass is mine


    Yeah








    My own personal Welcome to the Jungle I wrote when I was 19.
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    Re: songwriters' lounge








    Blue don't


    Touch my


    Green


    Because


    If I see you on


    The street


    Then I see you're on


    My beat





    Yeah


    Fuck the law


    Fuck the cops






    Because a cop


    Is a cop


    And you know


    We're all corrupt


    But if you


    Touch a cop


    Then it's more than


    Touching us





    Trust


    Fuck the law


    Fuck the cops





    Peace

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    Re: songwriters' lounge




    I'm a Chav


    I'm a Goth


    I'm a Stoner


    Can fuck off


    I'm a bit of


    Rough that's


    From the street


    I'm a Toff now


    Can't you see





    A Lesbian


    Of the town


    With the biggest


    Gun around



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    Re: songwriters' lounge





    FLICKING THE BEAN






    I'm just


    A pervert


    From the


    Circus


    The light's


    Bright now


    When it's


    Night out


    Women


    Find our


    Perfect


    Hideout


    From the


    Crowd now


    Too many eyes


    Have seen





    That I'm so


    Damn good


    You twist


    Flicking the bean



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    Re: songwriters' lounge

    A link to a Soundclouded recording of a song I wrote and recorded. Mostly I'm showing off the sound of my new Fuchs amp (the guitar shows up eventually). Hope you like it.

    https://soundcloud.com/jim-bordner/so-damn-blue

    PS: I won't apologize for the Steely Dan thing. That's just what happened to me.

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    Re: songwriters' lounge

    Quote Originally Posted by Gravity Jim View Post
    A link to a Soundclouded recording of a song I wrote and recorded. Mostly I'm showing off the sound of my new Fuchs amp (the guitar shows up eventually). Hope you like it.

    https://soundcloud.com/jim-bordner/so-damn-blue

    PS: I won't apologize for the Steely Dan thing. That's just what happened to me.
    No need to apologize about the Steely Dan to me, I also listened to freighters' worth of them back in the day. I had been a fan since their first album and to this day Aja is still one of the best albums ever and I've yet to hear anything that surpasses it nor do I expect to.

    Oh, yeah, the guitar part is just kicking in. Thanks, I didn't need any amplifier GAS, thank you very much

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    Quote Originally Posted by DanTheBluesMan View Post
    No need to apologize about the Steely Dan to me, I also listened to freighters' worth of them back in the day. I had been a fan since their first album and to this day Aja is still one of the best albums ever and I've yet to hear anything that surpasses it nor do I expect to.

    Oh, yeah, the guitar part is just kicking in. Thanks, I didn't need any amplifier GAS, thank you very much
    Thanks for listening, Dan!

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